Wayang - Shadow - Short Documentary -


newbie32

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Hi, im newbie.... need more advise...;)
really apreciated

[video=youtube;VUNdsaeT-lQ]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VUNdsaeT-lQ[/video]
 

newbie32>>> I like it overall. Good Job! :)

These are my personal preferences and humble opinions.
- I dun like the glares caused by your filter.
- In the first 20seconds video, maybe you could try the 5 second rule because the changes between clips is too fast. I was about to soak into the story and then it turn off.
- Maybe you could add in a little bit of the actual audio in the background. Not too loud. Just faded in the background. That will be awesome.
- If I may add, I would take a close up shots of the hands that move the puppets. I also would take a close up of those lips singing. Example in 1:05. I LOVE IT !!!!!
- Instead of zooming in and out fast, I would do a slow zooming.
- Do you colour grade it ?

Overall, I think it is fantastic work. Keep it coming. :)
 

hi daniyal....thank you so much for your advise....i'll consider your opinion....and discuss with my editor :D

newbie32>>> I like it overall. Good Job! :)

These are my personal preferences and humble opinions.
- I dun like the glares caused by your filter.
- In the first 20seconds video, maybe you could try the 5 second rule because the changes between clips is too fast. I was about to soak into the story and then it turn off.
- Maybe you could add in a little bit of the actual audio in the background. Not too loud. Just faded in the background. That will be awesome.
- If I may add, I would take a close up shots of the hands that move the puppets. I also would take a close up of those lips singing. Example in 1:05. I LOVE IT !!!!!
- Instead of zooming in and out fast, I would do a slow zooming.
- Do you colour grade it ?

Overall, I think it is fantastic work. Keep it coming. :)
 

some point i do agree with daniyal and imo some of your shot composition need to improve but i am no pro so you can ignore me =P thats what i feel.
 

some point i do agree with daniyal and imo some of your shot composition need to improve but i am no pro so you can ignore me =P thats what i feel.

yup...im still newbie, but in here i get much inspiration and advise, thank to ClubSnap... :D

i'll do better next time :)
 

nice but seems a little off-balanced eg... the first 46sec pre-show scenes were too long and no post-show shots

just personal opinion

best wishes
 

Some shots are interesting but you need to work more on your exposure. Alot looks underexposed especially during their prep. Also in future try not to take music from licensed groups without their permission. If i remember correctly the soundtrack is from ThePianoGuys. Even if you insist do credit them at least. You can gather royalty free music online or from SoundtrackPro.

Cheers.
 

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