haha, great that you are shooting when you are young! Gives you great advantage in terms of visualizing ideas into celluloid (or digital) reality in the future when you engage in bigger scale production. Great effort. Somehow, reminds me of jack neo, both in terms of the choice of topic ad style of narration. (which can be both a good thing and a bad thing) Go watch more movies, especially those classics and those textbook examples of great script like the usual suspect. Can see that you took great care in shooting in several location. The sissy at the end would have had greater impact had you planted him in every of your short segments such that he become a recurring motiff but then, u risk suggesting that typical singaporeans are sissy. Take care of ya framing, remember that all frame should have a purpose. Some if it were too tight. Also, when you have music, your visual should sync to the music like at the beginnning, where it was off. (the choice of music was not appropriate for setting the mood of ya short too). Finally, keep shooting!